可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;文中衔接词丰富。
Success is not directly related with beauty,but recently,more and more people hold a view that beauty is the shortcut to success.Even to the extent that many people think that now is a society that looks at the face. What we used to learn is that if one wants to be successful, one has to work very hard and pay enough efforts. It doesn’t really matter whether he or she is beautiful. However, in recent years, some people, especially the younger generation, are beginning to take a different point of view.A lot of young people in order to make themselves more beautiful, took the road to face lifting.Is it the beauty of the appearance really more important than the strength? As far as I am concerned,the inner goodness is more important than the beauty of the appearance.In the modern society, with the continuous development of the economic level, people pay more attention to their appearance.In the study and work, the appearance can only temporarily bring convenience.It is impossible that you want to succeed because of your appearance.If you want to be successful, you must have a clear goal, strong confidence, perseverance, the right way and a healthy body. To sum up, beauty not only make people feels comfortable, but also make yourself more confident.But beauty does not mean that success.If you want to be successful, this is the necessary condition of success is striving to improve yourself.
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