语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用。
If a foreign friend of yours is going to visit your hometown,what is the most interesting place you would like to take him/her to see and why? First,I would like to take my friend to my school,because there was a lot of interesting place in our school.In my school,the most beautiful place is the big lawn.When class over,students like to go to the big lawn to feel the native.