语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者在句法层面做的很棒;文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了。
If a foreign friend of me is going to visit your hometown,what is the most interesting place I would like to take him/her to see and why? First,I would like to take my friend to my school,because there was a lot of interesting place in our school.In my school,the most beautiful place is the big lawn.Students like to go to the big lawn to feel the native when class over,you can found zhe grass grow in the big lawn,to smell the fragrance from the grass.And you also can lay on the grass to look the bird is flying in the sky,