采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;注意句式在文中的变化,加强一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中用词稍显贫乏,文中存在一些拼写错误。
jean , I was a friend in my 6 years old.she was my neibuor and preshool classmate.she is skin and petty girl. she like play baseball on playgeound after lunch.20 years ago she moving to other city.I never saw her again. I miss her beautful face and kind for smail