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LiLei is my best friend.We are neighborhood. He likes icecream,so he is very fat.He is higher than me.I'd like to play with him than other children.We go to shcool together everyday.He has a lovely dog.It is white with black.After school,we do homework,and then,we wach TV such as funny sheeps,war of friuts and so on..We joined the xiangchuan club to play xiangchuan everyday.