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Dear Mr.and Mrs.Brown, I'm writing to you from my home in China. I'm really appreciate your help druing I was living in your home ,very thanks Mrs.Brown taught me to cook delicious foods ,especially for the dongpo meat,very thanks you took me to travel famous place ,all things had been made a deeply impression in my heart .I'm very love your good habit ,insist to do exercise outside , I expect we have opportuniate play table tennis again. Beijin weather is good in spring , if we stay outsite neighter cold ,nor big windy , if you can come to Beijin, I think you also will like this climate .I will take you to travel the famous place in Beijin ,Bijin temple ,the great wall ,and so on . I will take you to eat Beijing decilous foods ,especial for the Beijin roast duck . Yours faithully Jeese He