2007年高考英语作文真题(广东卷):谁是你的偶像

语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用高级词汇就更好了；可适当增加复合句和从句的使用。

Last week, I did a survey among 2600 students in one school, which is about your idol. According to this investment, we are easy to find that there are a lot of differences between girls and boys on choosing who as their idols. The girls prefer to choose film stars rather than sports stars, but the boys are just opposite to them. The chart is also showed that the positions of parents are higher in girls' hearts than in boys' hearts. Choosing parents as their idols rank 2 in girls' opinions while the boys put them into the forth position. However, to our surprise, both 18% girls and boys choose famous persons as their idols. From the point of my view, parent is the first choice that I will choose because they give me life and raise me without complaints and regrets. In my heart, they are not only my parent but also my idol.