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lydia is my best friend she is a lovely girl who is smart and friendlly i met her in my first year in school at first i didn't like her at all she looked really cool and untouchable however as time goes by i have learned about her and became friend with lydia we go to the dining hall with each other and play with each other others said are you twins you always come out with the other