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My favorite sport is paly football. before my ten aged,I didnot like playing any kind of balls,since I got an abandoned football on the front of my house, I often invited my friends to play football.we are very happy and exciting every time when we play together.and I found if you often play football, you can run more quicklly than before. and often play football is good for your health. I recognized a lot of famours person throught play football, and I made a lot of new friends during football games. My favourit football star is Beckham, now I have a dream that I want to became a professional football player. now I play football at least 3hours every day .