采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;丰富的使用了长难句;文章用了较为丰富的词汇,高级词汇略显单薄,同时注意单词拼写的检查。
My favorite sport is play football. Before my ten-years -old,I didnot play any kind of balls,since I got an abandoned football on the front of my house, I thought it was a good opportunity to practice playing football, thenI often invited my friends to play football,we always play happy and exciting,and I found if you often play football, you can run more quickly than before. and often play football is good for your health. And I also recognized a lot of famours person throught play football, and I made a lot of new friends during football games. My favourit football star is Beckham, now my dream is to become a professional football player. now I play football at least 3hours every day .