文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词;若增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;作者词汇量偏小,本文拼写错误较多。
I love football , playing football is my best interest. By a chance ,One time i picked up a football on the way to my home,I played it together wih my friends ,from that time i have alreay like playing football deeply. I will be trainning and racing with my claasmates. I love the best football star is beikehanmu from UK ,I wish i can become a professional football palyer in future.