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作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升，高级词汇使用过少；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；行文较为流畅，作者文中过渡词使用的不错。
When we come to this world,when we have life,we will face to everything and we should do something to make our life become significant. What are important things? People often say, knowledge is power. So we should learn, to improve our mind, to enlarge our view. We also use knowledge to create wealth. In addition to this, we should go out to see this word. There was a well-known saying that the world is very large and I want to see.We should travel, make some good friends, have a happy family.
