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A Beautiful City In China I hope my hometown will be very beautiful, it has new house and new air. It has the most beautiful trees and flowers, I think I can see it. When my friends come my hometown, I think I can they will fall in love with my hometown. It will have be very much tall-buildings, the people will very happy to spend every day. My homeown is very beautiful, because it has interesting people, birds, fish, trees, etc. If you come to my hometown, you must fall in love with it.
