可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
Playing basketball is my favorite hobby. In fact i fell in love with football because of an incident,one day on my way home, i picked up a football by accident, and then i played it with my friends happily. From then on, i began to love playing football. We often play football together and hold football matches ourselves. My favorite football star is Beckham from England, and my dream is to be a professional football player in the future.