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Nowadays, with the development of the internet, more and more studets can be benefited from the network. we can search for all the information we want, shop online and do many more interesting things. we have experienced a great variety of lifestyles in the internet. At the same time , some people like to make friends online,they think that making friends through internet is one of the way to expand their circle of friends. but ,as to me ,I don't think it is the good way to make friend through internet. There should be three reason are as follows. Firstly, It is estimated that nearly 20 % people have been murdered or raped by the friends from internet. especially among girls. Secondly, a lot of students could be influenced by the internet. when someone meet a new friend from internet, they could be fell in love with each other . As the result, they would lag behind other classmates . thirdly, over using internet will do harm to ours eyesight. If you want to be someone with clear eyes. You should keep a far distance from the internet. As far as I am concered, we should make real friends in the real world rather than finding it from internet.
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