采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;丰富的使用了长难句;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
My hometown is a small place on south,but i like very much,A few years ago,my hometown very beautiful that have the rivers、trees、houses and streets.there was many trees around of our town,and the rivers was very clear with some fishes swam in the water.the house simple to builded of the wood,and the streets were very narrow,people works very hard. Nowadays there is many high building in our hometome and kinds of the car can see everywhere on the streetes.But the environment more and more bad for the industral development .so the trees and fish less more and more.pollution is urgency now.