文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
Welcome to our club! The club's name is the Hao Hao Piano club. Do you know our club? Last month, we had a Piano party. Our club have 13 programs about Piano. We interviewed a lot of people after this party. They said that the party is very good and hope that we will do that usually. If you want to play the Piano, you can enter our club. You don't spend any money, because it is free. But you can't play the Piano, you enter our club too, because we will teach you. I believe that you enter our club and must play Piano after three months. If you join into our club, we will be very excited. If you join into our club, you will do what you never did before. If you join into our club, you will be every excited. So, I hope you enter our club as soon as possible.