采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩。
Dudu is our family dog. Today is his ninth birthday.It's a birthday gift is a big bone, Dudu happily cried, We are very happy, it's hair is white, rolling on the floor like a ball,adorable. My classmates also like toot, like the white hair, I am very happy, because I like doodle.