希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
This is our house.It's nice and big!It's a warm world. All family lives in it. Ha!This is my parents'room.It's big.My father is sit on the this chair.My mother is sleep on this bed. This is my room.It's name's "Ann park" because it's very lovely and interesting.This is my desk.Everyday I do homework here.This is my bed.It's pink because pink is my favourite color. This is our sitting room.It's tidy.It has a table,four chairs,a TV,a mat and a flower.We often sing songs here and watch TV here. This is our book room.It's big but small than the sitting room.It has many many wonderful books.We are read books and newspapers here. This is our bathroom.It's big.We take baths,wash faces and brush teeth here. Our house!Our warm world!I love U!