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My home has a lot of beautiful clocks, from small to large. In the living room is a big clock. It's red. There is also a clock in the kitchen. It's a small one. It's orange, like an orange. My mother's bedroom has a small clock, is pink, there will be a ticking sound. My room has a very small alarm clock, every morning will ring ring the bell "to wake me up, it is blue, the shape is a car.