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Last weekend,I went to a safari park.I saw many differert kinds of animals there.I just could't blieve my eyes when I saw what in the safari park.Tigers,monkeys,lions,koalas and giraffes were living in their own "houes".How lively it is!Many visitors were played and visited in it.Everyone played in happyness.Such as:some of the visitors were feeding the monkeys.some were playing with tigers.They were friendly to each other.Not only the people bat also these animals.So we should more care for the animals.They are so kindness.But how can we protect the animals?One great thing is protect the enveronment from destruction.Don't throw the rubbish anywhere is very important.To make a long story shout:protecting animals is protecting ourself!