加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;高级词汇偏少,且文中有部分拼写错误;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Last weekend,I went to a safari park.I saw many different kinds of animals there.I just could't blieve my eyes .Tigers,monkeys,lions,koalas and giraffes were living in their own "house".How lively it is!Many guests were played and visited in it.Everyone played in happyness.Such as:some of the visitors were feeding the monkeys.some were playing with tigers.They were friendly to each other.Not only the persons bat also these animals.So we should more care for the animals.They are so clover.But how can we protect the animals?One great thing is protecting the enveronment from destruction.Don't throw the rubbish anywhere is very important.To make a long story shout:protecting animals is protecting ourself!