采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;句式变化多样;文中拼写错误稍多,作者词汇量偏小。
my hometown is fujian province,we are traving to shanghai,I am happy have a good holiday during in shanghai,I lern a lot in keke website which introduced by teacher. I lern a lot in keke website which introduced by teacher,we are happy and grade that i have time to do this