全文结构较为严谨;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;文中拼写错误稍多,作者词汇量偏小。
in conclusion,both sides are reasonable.But they are one-sided.In my opinion,hosting the Olympics at a permanent home has a great deal of advantages and disadvantages.In my opnion,the host Olympicss beyond all discusion ,but we should make sure that let the every country has the rights of hosting the olympics.in conclusion,both sides are reasonable.But they are one-sided.In my opinion,hosting the Olympics at a permanent home has a great deal of advantages and disadvantages.In my opnion,the host Olympicss beyond all discusion ,but we should make sure that let the every country has the rights of hosting the olympics.