文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨;作者词汇基础较薄弱,要注意积累高级词汇,单词拼写要认真。
In conclusion,both sides are reasonable nonetheless they are one-sided.In my opinion,hosting the Olympics at a permanent home has plenty of advantages and disadvantages.In my opinion,the host Olympicss beyond all discusion ,but we should make sure that let the every country has the rights of hosting the olympics.In conclusion,both sides are reasonable,nonetheless they are one-sided.In my opinion,hosting the Olympics at a permanent home has plenty of advantages and disadvantages.In my opinion,the host Olympicss beyond all discusion ,but we should make sure that let the every country has the rights of hosting the olympics