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Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the internet recently.When many people go across the streets,they even don't look at the traffic lights.And it maybe brings about some serious problems.Some of them lack awarness of traffic safety.The others maybe in a hurry time.I think those behaviors must be corrected right away.Above all,everyone should obey the traffic rules.In my opinion,it is necessary to pay attention to the traffic lights when you are going to cross the street,never go across when the traffic light is red.And you are supposed to walk on the zebra road.No jaywalking.No hurry.Try to be responsible to yourself whenever you are.