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I went on a trip to Beijing last year .The air is fresh there.It is usually sunny on that time ,but the weather in Beijing was very cool. I arrived in Beijing at ten in the morning on the September thirtieth. Beijing was a beautiful place . I went to Tian’anmen Square on the October first.It was a big place. After lunch, I visited the GuGongHistory museum and we visited the Great Wall next day.It was big and beautiful .It was great!I like it very much. Beijing is a good place to visit.