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In conclusion, both sides are reasonable, nonetheless they are one-sided. In my opinion, I am convinced that the disadvantage of holding the Olympics in the same country far outweighs its advantage.Therefore, it is strongly recommended that we encourage holding the Olympics in different countries.In conclusion, both sides are reasonable, nonetheless they are one-sided. In my opinion, I am convinced that the outweigh of holding the Olympics in the same country far outweigh its demerits. Therefore, it is strongly recommended that we encourage holding the Olympics in different countries.