句法方面做的很棒,加强复杂句的使用;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且要加强拼写检查。
I have a good friend, and her name is xie dan. Xie dan is my classmate in my university. She is a beautifull girl with a pair of big eays,when she talks with somebody her eays likes the crescent moon. she is interested in singing and dancing.When she was young her teacher found out she has a great talent in singing and dancing, and suggested she develop in singing and dancing. In the study,she gave me a lot of assistance,if i have any problem,she is alway the first answer for me. I am glad to make friends with her.