文章词汇表达比较灵活,学术词汇的使用要继续加强;但从句使用不熟练,注意平时练习中多积累;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
It was fine.I went for an outing with my classmates today. In the morning,We got together in front of school gate at half past eight.When everyone was here,we started to go to the People's Park by bike.It cost about twenty minutes' ride. In the Park,we had great fun playing game together until about 12 o'clock.We were all tired and hungry,so we took out food from our bags,then we had a picnic. In the afternoon,we went around the park.There were many beautiful places.We couldn't help taking photos.Besides,we visited the zoo in the park.There were various kinds of animals.Such as monkey,elephant,tiger,deer and so on... We left the part at 5 o'clock.It was an unforgettable experience.