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I often help another people.How about you,do you often help another people.So,I want to be a volunteer in the future. If I to be a volunteer.I want to help people in my free time.The poeple in the poor areas are so difficult.Althrough their life is very poor,but they always very happy.I want to use my change money to help them. Then,I want to help the old people.Most of them are very lonly.I hope I can give them some warm.I can talk my story with them.I also can help them do some housework.These old people need our help. At last,I would like to make some toys.Children are very poor in the poor areas. They don't have TV.They don't have phone.Some children even don't have books.I also want to give them some books. There are many people in need in the world.If you want to give them some help. Please give me your helping hands,we certrainly to agree with your suggest!
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