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I like helping people who need help. I enjoy singing very much. So, if I have a chance to volunteer, I’d like to be a teacher to teach children many songs that I like. I love children. Looking at their smile is so happy. And I think it’s also my honor to make others happier. If I am a volunteer, I will be a great one.
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