简单句比重过高,另应加强复杂句的练习;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,可是单词拼写做的不错;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
I often help other people.How about you,do you often help other people.So,I want to be a volunteer in the future. If I can be a volunteer in the future.I want to help people in my free time.The people in the poor areas are so difficult.Althrough their life is very poor, they always very happy.I want to use my change of money to help them. Then,I want to help the old people.Most of them are very lonely.I hope I can give them some warm.I can talk my story with them.I can also help them do some housework.These old people need our help. At last,I would like to make some toys.Children are very poor in the poor areas. They don't have TV.They don't have phone.Some children even don't have books.I also want to give them some books. There are many people in need in the world.If you want to give them some help. Please give me your helping hands,we certrainly to agree with your suggest!
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