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2014年初中毕业升学考试英语作文集锦153:志愿者

发布时间:2015-07-31 15:53浏览次数:1417
要求:
你愿意帮助他人吗?如果你有机会成为志愿者,你愿意做什么工作呢?为什么?
根据以上要求,写一篇短文。
用户的作文(系统评分51.0分
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简单句比重过高,另应加强复杂句的练习;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,可是单词拼写做的不错;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。

用户练习作文:

I often help other people.How about you,do you often help other people.So,I want to be a volunteer in the future. If I can be a volunteer in the future.I want to help people in my free time.The people in the poor areas are so difficult.Although their life is very poor, they always very happy.I want to use my change of money to help them. Then,I want to help the old people.Most of them are very lonely.I hope I can give them some warm.I can talk my story with them.I can also help them do some housework.These old people need our help. At last,I would like to make some toys.Children are very poor in the poor areas. They don't have TV.They don't have phone.Some children even don't have books.I also want to give them some books. There are many people in need in the world.If you want to give them some help. Please give me your helping hands,we certrainly to agree with your suggest!

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