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I have a best friend ,Her name is kevin,she has a pair of beautiful eyes and small mouth ,She has also a long black hair,she likes swimming、excise、playing basketball、climb moutain、sing and dance .She study is very good.we are always did homework after school in my home,I like her very much,she is very good for me.when I have some difficulty in my study,she always help me to resolve.Iam really appreciate to her.This is my best friend in my life.