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I have a best friend ,Her name is kevin,she has a pair of beautiful eyes and small mouth ,She has also a long black hair,she likes swimming、excise、playing basketball、climb moutain、sing and dance .She is a good student and study is very good.we are always did homework after school in my home,I like her very much,she is very good for me.when I have some difficulty in my study,she always help me to resolve.Iam really appreciate to her.This is my best friend in my life.