文章结构严谨,有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分;作者应适量增加从句的使用量;作者词汇使用较为丰富熟练,单词拼写方面要更仔细。
At present,whether the dialects can be accepted in public places spark a heated discussion.Different people hold different views.In my opion ,it is disappropriate to accept dialects in public places.There are three juristification to support my view. Firstly,As is well known to us,different places have different dialects.hence,it is difficult for people to well-understand each other coming from different cities.If a CEO or a celebrity address in public places with dialect not the manderin, it gives the audience great difficulty to understand what he have said.what's more,it may lead some people to misunderstand the speaker's intention.Secondly,in public places ,using dialects is not respectful to the audience.The audience could understand the manderin not the dialect the speaker said .there was set a barrier for each other to communicate.Thirdly,It is better for us to use dialects in private places,which can enhance the friendship between the people form same places.It can remove the strangeness within the fellowship persons.while in public places,using dialects could give the other people a sense of distance,not knowing how to track the speaker's pace. In conclusion,it is not sensible to use dialects in pulic places,and it may receive less support from the whole country.