文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨;能适当使用从句,但不够熟练;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且检查文中的拼写错误。
A number of man can be see shopping more internet to shopping these day ,which brings about convenientions and fast to man . But internet shopping also dadly to man .because some store deceptive website in internet shopping . I think we've the awareness of being away form cheat. go to supermarket shopping help our healthy.
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