过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;简单句比重稍微偏高,文中有句子错误;文章用词太过单一,且单词拼写错误较多。
A number of man can be see shopping more internet to shopping these day,which brings about conveniention and fast to man. But internet shopping also dadly to man .because of some store deceptive website in internet shopping. I think we've the awareness of being away form cheat. we can go to the supermarket shopping,which help our healthly.
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