文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错。
My name is Yvonne.I am a twenty old girl.Lily is my best friend. She is nineteen old girl.Yeah. We are neighbour and classmate too.We spend all the free time with together. Just like family rather than friend. She is a lovely and kind girl. So she always saw beautiful. We love each other.