正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错。
My name is Yvonne.I am a twenty old girl.Lily is my best friend. She is nineteen old girl.Yeah. We are neighbour and classmate too.We spend all the free time with together. Just like family rather than friends. She is a lovely and kind girl. She always made me happy. We love each other.