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Hello,everyone. Recently,Chinese dream is a very popular topic all over our country.Everybody has his own dream.Everybody takes about his dream.Of course I have a dream too. Now,let me tell you something about it.My dream is to have a new house.As we all know,it is too expensive to buy a house at present.And its price seems to arise much higher in the future.I hardly afford it but I really want to have it.If I have a house,it means I have a full family.I can give my son a better place to live and grow up.I can make my wife happy.I can invite my friends to have some fun in my house.I can do everything I want in my own world. Altough it is a difficult thing,it is not an impossible thing.It inspires me to work harder and harder.I'll try my best to achieve my dream and I believe there is a one day it will be come true .