正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。
Do you know Tom?He is a lovely and lively boy.He comes from Shanxi province.We study in Yatai primery school Class3 Grade1.We are deskmate too. He likes much food,such as vegetables,fruits,chocolate,and fish.She dislikes pork, sweets and green tea. Due to he is extremely clever.So he is good at maths.He can not only play the piano but also play the Sun.He played the piano at the concert in the The National Grand Theater when he was six.I think his performance is just extraordinary.I am proud with him. Especially he is frequently ready to help others.He is passionate too. Tomorrow is his birthday.I will buy a present for him.Give him a pleasantly surprised. I am looking forward to playing well with him.He will become my lasting throughout life friend.