语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;作者句法基础较为扎实。
Last week, a friend of mine came to visit me, I felt so surprised, because we lose touch for many years, he was my classmate when I was in primary school, now five years has passed, both of us have entered college. My friend told me that he was doing a research, he remembered my home address, so he came to visit me. We talked many things in primary school,and it was a beautiful memory, both of us were naughty at that time, but we loved sport, we played basketball match and won the first place. When the time he left, we made the deal to gather for the next time.