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I have some friends in Simon English School. One of them is my best friend. His name is boyd. He and I are both thirteen years old. I am a little older than him, but he is a little fatter than me. He is shorter than I, and he is thinner than I. He wears a pair of glasses but I don't. He likes to eat pocket-food, and he is a gentleman in a sense that when he has pock-food he will share them with us. He and I are in the same school and in the same class. So, we can help each other. We alway play in the school together. he likes to do thing I like. He lives in the Ningbo Jiangdong, so he hardly came to my home in Zhenghai but I alway go to his home on weekends and he sometimes will come to my home on weekends. Sometimes we will fight but we alway get along well. His mother is a doctor in the Li-Hui-Li hospital and I know where her office is. His father is a worker in the Bei-Lun power plant. He is a head of a group. So, his father has a lot of work to do. He and I are in the same school. We usually have a good time so he is my best friend.