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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36980
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
用户的作文(系统评分40.5分
评语:

增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中词汇丰富度不足,拼写检查也要重视;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。

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have one friend.Her name is Sunny.She is very health.She exercise every day.And her eating babits are pretty good.She do not like milk,but she drink it every day.Her mother say that is good for her health.She likes junk food too.But she try to eat less junk food.And she sleeps nine hours every night.So,she is pretty healthy. I have another friend.His name is Mike.He is different from Sunny.He is unhealthy.He hardly ever exercise.And he loves junk food,he eats them three or four times a week.So he things he is unhealthy. Both Sunny and Mike are my friends ,altough they are different.

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