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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36980
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
用户的作文(系统评分68.0分
评语:

单词拼写很棒,可考虑增加高级词汇的使用量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。

用户练习作文:

Do you know Tom?He is a lovely and lively boy.He comes from Shanxi province.We study in Yatai primery school Class3 Grade1.We are deskmate too. He likes much food,such as vegetables,fruits,chocolate,and fish.nonetheless pork, sweets and green tea not.He has many hobbies, such as dancing,reading and playing the computer games. Due to he is extremely clever.So he is good at maths.And he attaches importance to maths.He can not only play the piano but also play the Sun. He consider it is fun to play the musical instrument. He played the piano at the concert in the The National Grand Theater when he was six. I consider his performance is just extraordinary.I am proud with him. Especially he is frequently ready to help others.He is passionate too. Tomorrow is his birthday.I will buy a present for him.Give him a pleasantly surprised. I am looking forward to playing well with him.He will become my lasting throughout life friend.

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