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It is exciting that one of me foreign friend who's name Lily from England will come to China and visit my hometown,I will plan to introduce our hometown interesting place to her,lily was arrived here yesterday,and I plan to guide her 2 nice places to go. My hometown is YouXian,ZHUZHOU,HUHAN,which is a long history city, well,the first place is the funny hill where behind my house,this hill haven't any big tree,there are most yellow sand,it was have most of my childhood fun,when I was a little girle,after class over we was running in here with my classmate, we can breath the fresh air and enjoy free,we was running one hill to another hill,we even stealed protatos to bake in this hil after shool, it is really a very miss place.I think lily will like this place,becouse we can sit on one of hill to breath the fresh air and talk our history,happy,and unhappy things,we can relax ourself complete to each other. The second place is the stream,there are many fish in here,this stream wide just 1 -2 meter, the water is not deep,the stream water is used for our hometown banker,so it is very long through our banker,there are many shirmp and fish,when i was little,we always get fish and shirmp in here,I think lily will intereted here, becouse we can go to the stream to catch fish or swimming in here,we also can walk to around the stream to see my hometown banker,those banker bring me up,and give me wisdom,and it including my hometown farmer's labor. I love this 2 intererting place,becouse they are contianed my childhood fun,I think lily like them too.
