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I am a girl,but i'm full of ability. My favorate sport is football. By chance i kown football and fall in love with it.On my way home,i get one, so i always play it with my friends. Many time we train ourselves.The football is a part of my life,so bakehanmu is my favorate sports star.When i grow up that i hope i can become a professonal football player like my football star.How do you think about my dream?