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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36946
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
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作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;文章衔接手法恰当;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用。

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The drawing vividly reflects a daughter is chatting with her mother in their house. The eyes sparkling with delight, the daughter tells her mother, “Good news mom! I was accepted to the college of your choice.” Obviously, the implication of the portrayal is that the daughter is lack of independence due to her mother’s doting care. The lovely daughter is naturally associated with the only children in our current society; the college of the mother’s choice epitomizes parents’ doting care and abundant material supplies that can shield the children from the harsh reality. Once the young people begin to seek independence and accept challenges from the real world, they are found too spoiled to be strong enough in the face of difficulties. Accordingly, it is vital for us to derive positive implications from the thought-provoking drawing. On the one hand, we can frequently use it to enlighten the youth to be more independent in life. On the other hand, parents should be sensible enough to give their children more freedom to deal with troubles and problems.

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